Hello I have an animatic here
How can i make this much more simplified and shorter. I notice the animation mentor films are usually 1 min or less, I want mine to be the same. Please let me know how to simplify the story and timing to make it more audience friendly.
My first attempt
http://coreyloving.com/Animation/ZooTikesS...atic4-sound.mov
My 2nd Attempt
http://coreyloving.com/Animation/BabyBluesAnimatic.mov
Im going to remake the animatic again, but this time get rid of the slime ball because I dont think people will understand it or like it.
Heres my idea.
-The Blue Baby takes the ball away from the Gray baby
-The Gray baby starts to cry
-The Blue Baby looks at the ball he just stole and feels bad
-Blue Baby rolls the ball at the crying Gray Baby,
-The Gray Baby looks up at the Blue Baby who has a look of Compasion
-They both smile and start to play roling the ball back and forth and the camera pans out
What do you think?
Im trying to illiminate any confusion points that I think there were so far such as
1.) Baby SUddenly falling alseep
2.) Slime ball coming out of his nose
Yet also keep the parts people like
1.) The baby crying
2.) Facial expressions of the Blue Baby
Do you think this new idea is effective? It wont be humurous, will that hurt it? Please let me know guys, I could really use the feedback.
Here is my third attempt with the new story
http://coreyloving.com/Animation/ZooTikesS...atic6-sound.mov
Ignore the bad music and recycled scenes from previous animatic.
Anyway I seriously am interested in feedback. Is this new story better, worst?