Braveheart Speach Needing Some Crits Please

[mtx]

Hey Fellow Animators,

I have been working on this lyp sync for some time and I think its about ready for some crits. Please rip it apart and tell me all the things I need to fix so I can use it on my demo.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QtEaDqEdDVU

Take it Easy,

Justin

[daikath]

First impression, on the U's, I's, maybe w's, your mouth needs to open more.  A lot of sounds the mouth stays too closed.

[mtx]

Hello,

i have done some more animation tweeks, added a third camera cut and did a high resolution render. still looking for crits please let me know what you think.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rwMJjSHAXYE

Take it Easy,

Justin

[daikath]

Lip sync is a lot better now, the poses seem to be well enough. But it goes very mechanical from one pose to another, try using tangents in the graph editor to change how fast it eases from one position into another. Also his hands sometimes just get stuck in air, or when he moves his left hand to make a dramatic gesture his left hand barely moves, making it also look mechanical.

I hope these help.

[joojaa]

It seems to me like the syc of the audio is slightly off?

[daikath]

To build on Jooja's comment, have the lip sync animation be a few frames before the actual sound comes. Because the light we see is faster then the sound we hear when someone speaks. So in order to have it seem right, basically have the same animation on the mouth, but move all the keys one or two frames back.

[mtx]

Hello,

Thanks for your comments I have made some more tweeks. I smoothed out the walk cycle, added more eye brow animation, added slight movements to each arm when they where still, changed how he said "one chance just one chance" to make it more dramatic, and tweeked his final pose.

More feedback would be nice I need to make this as good as possible for my portfolio im sick of working at jobs I hate lol.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E16efFUBTII

Take it Easy,

Justin

[mtx]

I have done some more tweeks please take a look and let me know what you think.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uRdvXbZxIUU

[cb8rwh]

MooM as the savior of the Scotts... who would've guessed.

I'll point out one thing here.  When he drives his sword into the ground he lifts it up kind of fast, holds it, then brings it down kind of fast.  The up and the down are the same speed.  You can really show the impact if you stagger these two speeds.  Raise the arms at about the same speed in the beginning, keep raising them a bit even through the hold at the top and bring the sword down really fast.  Two maybe three frames tops.  Through this you get a greater build up of strength through anticipation and then "THUNK", a solid impact into the ground.  Two frame animations will seem fast in playblast, but it will still register with the audience and display a lot of force. 

This sword thrust is also a great chance to get a good arc of motion at the top of MooM's back.  Act it out and record yourself a few times from the side and watch how your back moves when you drive something into the dirt.  Don't even worry about the words.  The back and shoulders tense beautifully backwards and up before releasing the energy down and forwards.  The hips add a lot to this motion as well.