looks good to me. I dont really care if they look as if their dated back, that could very well be your motive anyway. If its an exercise for you to develop the skills, its good. Ive used Maya for about a little less than 2 years for architecture/interior/products, but have never used Mental Ray! I know. Im a sucker. I dont know, but since your still learning this, could you help me out too? Ive got Maya 6.0.1 for Mac os x.3, but I dont even know jack about mental ray nor HDRI??
All in all, the image looks clean and well done to me. GOOD JOB!