Short Film Needs Critique!

[hebus]

Hey guys,

Just finished the blocking phase of my short and I need some critique. Rip it apart. I would love to see what you guys have to say. Any comments are welcome from story to camera to editing to animation. I'm gonna post it on youtube for now but I'll update my website as things progress. Thanks!

the link http://youtube.com/watch?v=XCjF5X6faOg

[fortner_mike]

The idea is ok, the lights and shaders/textures...well i guess they will be fine when rendered. But whats up with the character animation. I really cant say much, because i cant really see the animation, just some frames. So i guess i will just have to wait till you upload more detailed video.

P.S, the fluid fire looks weird, but i guess it will look fine when rendered, anyhow using 3d container would make it much more realistic.

[hebus]

Hey thirt33n,

This stage of the animation is called blocking. You only set up the main poses in each scene, the ones that drive the animation. It would be comparable to thumbnailing or storyboarding if I was drawing it out. There has been no effort placed on anything yet but the animation which is mostly what I was looking for critique on. As for the fire that was an online clip I threw over top of my edit and put the layer on screen. Didn't really wanna mess around with particles and and what not quite just yet. Anyways thanks for the response, if you care to comment on the animation that's what I was focusing on.

[fortner_mike]

I see. Well that justs shows my lack of knowledge and skill in animation , im more of a modeler. I guess this could be quite funy, especialy if you make some realistic facial expressions. Check this out, and you will se what i mean http://www.highend3d.com/boards/index.php?showtopic=235946