You realy need to work on your camera runs! For example the craftlocked camrera shot give sthe impression of watching a videogame. You should bring the feeling of speed into the camerawork and let the camera get lagged a bit behind the craft for a feeling of high speeds. Especialy in the shots where the background isn't visible so for example when the 3 ships come in let the appear form nowhere very fast let the camera gain up on them briefly (for the nice speed effect of the bakground) and let them sill exit out the shot steadily from left but by easing out much slower now you just lock it to the crafts then drop it.
In sense your camerwork does not in all places capture the feeling of speed.
Also you need to work on the lightning, as all this realy does is scream games graphics. Its be fun as a game but as it is now it realy does not give the feeling of cinematics.
At places this looks like overbright x-wing game form the 80's
